Lost Creek Hollow Should I revise or rewrite

she hoped treason did not feel slighted, or that mona had expected a word tossed to bearclaw. truth me told, it was irrelevant now, given the proximity of their packs to one another. xan, indra, and laurel would see fit a course of action, and mona was loyal enough to know that she would not question it. unsure of what to say, the girl smiled warmly, giving a little wave of her plume.
"it might be nice to have new neighbors," she mused aloud. "do you have little ones with you? playdates can always ... be arranged. eventually," mona finished lamely; it was not her decision to make, and she was fumbling at this small talk.