Lost Creek Hollow Should I revise or rewrite

liffey. rannoch. mona liked the sound of the names immediately, and it showed in the brightening of her expression. "thank you. that would be very nice." warming to the woman, with no way to know that in the future she would answer to treason as a leader, the young mayfair's ears swept forward at the next inquiry.
"there aren't any large predators around, of which i know, but bearclaw is of course named for the bears that used to roam there. i haven't seen any since i've lived in the valley, but i do wonder if one winter they won't come back to sleep."