Lost Creek Hollow Should I revise or rewrite

She went through her mental map of the area and was pretty sure she knew where the pack must be settled just by virtue of a hole in her travels. Don't think I've been by.  Easthollow, yes, but they'd been far enough from Bearclaw that she hadn't really paid attention to another pack existing there.  Perhaps back when she first entered the Wilds she'd noticed.  Did any other Tindome wolves go there?  She hadn't known much about that pack breaking up, just that over time the scents left.  It hadn't been important at the time, 

Yes.  Most of us at least.  She gauged Mona's expression at this.  Treason didn't know whether or not Mona knew many of the Sunspire wolves back from when they lived nearby, but if she did have a few buddies who'd stuck around, at the very least Treason could probably answer about their whereabouts.  The mountain didn't seem a good choice for the winter.  It was perhaps a little cagey, but at the same time it was also the truth.  The prey was still low, even if it was returning, and that might make the winter more harsh than it needed to be.  And if Rannoch now didn't particularly like raising kids on the slopes of a mountain, that still hung under the same banner.