Lost Creek Hollow Should I revise or rewrite

She was thinking that perhaps she'd wander off and investigate some of the surrounding areas for prey.  Not too far, but enough that she'd be able to tell what might wander through their lands later on as winter got to be more of a jerk.  After all, trees would provide shelter and the creeks could provide non-frozen water if they didn't freeze.  Or did they freeze?  Heck if she knew.  They'd figure it out soon enough.

Treason wove her way through the unfamiliar territory to the edge, pausing a moment as she too spotted the deer that from her spot were directly in front but heading perpendicular.  Convenient.  Eventually she started forward again, planning on getting a little bit closer to investigate.  She hadn't spotted the other wolf, an err on her part, due to her attention being so quickly drawn away.  The deer did kind of look delicious.