Lost Creek Hollow Should I revise or rewrite

For now she'd hold off on making crude remarks about the other two litters that had leeched off of the pack and then bolted. Some other time. Yes, our alpha, Rannoch, and his mate Liffey have their brood.  I imagine they'll probably want to rest their paws a bit first, but I can mention it to them.  It's not too far, after all. She wouldn't really get a chance before Bearclaw showed up on their doorstep.  That was one way to solve the distance issue at least.

Forever a guardian, she continued and asked, Has there been anything in the area that you think we should be wary of? It doesn't seem like things are out of the ordinary, but I could be wrong. There were always downsides.